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April 27th, 2008, 12:59 am

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Reply jacob the comicmaker, April 27th, 2008, 1:01 am

Arg. This comic took me into 2:00 in the morning.

enjoy.

Reply BMB(Well I'm not BMB anymore) (Guest), April 27th, 2008, 1:40 am

Could you please stop using my character in this comic? Thanks.

Reply jacob the comicmaker, April 27th, 2008, 1:44 am

Which charcater are you refering to, as I don't know who your talking about.

Reply Ryan and the chickens, April 27th, 2008, 2:16 am

Funny thing is, technically I keep my character at about the age of 10 so I don't see why the humans don't just capture me. :P

Also, maybe she's keeping the documents hidden because they're false or contain information about her and she figures she can use Slash to corrupt them since he's NAIVE NO OFFENCE PLS SORRY RITE NOW

Reply MattFoxx, April 27th, 2008, 6:30 am

Ryan: He's playing naive I think.

Jacob/BMB: He means Jeox Jacob, a brown hedgehog in a white top and I think either white or black trousers/pants.

Reply Ganato, April 27th, 2008, 8:53 am

well we got a problem here..

Reply Shard, April 27th, 2008, 9:05 am

Jealoussss

Reply Slash Segary, April 27th, 2008, 10:38 am

@Ryan: Did you pay attention the the intro comics (pg 125-126) for Slash? If not then there is no way that he would be fooled by false documents

On a more related note I find it funny how with in just 2 days he is trusted by Wolf enough that his word is enough and Mia to get to see those papers. Slash has some really good charisma status. Or he just gives off some really good vibe that people end up trusting him...hmmm

Reply stoopidmahn, April 27th, 2008, 10:46 am

@Slash: Its the sleeves
everybody luvs the sleeves : D

Reply jacob the comicmaker, April 27th, 2008, 11:58 am

Actully I would say it's brother bonded by truame slash >.>

Plus he's a furry that hasnt yet pointed gun at them.

Reply Slash Segary, April 27th, 2008, 12:04 pm

@Jacob: well that may be fine and all, but still I don't think that within just 2 days they would trust him so easily. then again I guess I'm only talking for Slash here. anyways he is that quick to gain trust what would it be like in Al kran? XD

Alright I was looking for gramatical errors and here is what I found.

second pannel Triat
"showed you those papers! she must like you." the "she" sould be capitolized

Third pannel Slash
"Um Wolf" should have a comma between the words.

"prisoner I….I saw alot of things." when someone stutters it should be more like "I-I" and not "I...I" also the word "alot" is actually two words "a" "lot" it is never a compount sentence.

"Captured furries being tested on…..I also saw…..*sigh* I saw captured " the "..." should be "," becuse the "..." shows for a long pause but only at the end of text not inbetween them. though the one between the "saw and *sigh*" is alright though try only using three "." since that is the length of the pauses.

Pannel Six Slash
"Um.. She want's" should be "Um, she wants" there is no apostrophe between the "t" and "s" in wants and the ".." should be a comma.

That is all I could find thank you for your time and have a great day ^^

Reply dr mercha, April 27th, 2008, 12:23 pm

spooky...

Reply Jacob (Guest), April 27th, 2008, 12:53 pm

Well soppusly there's also papers. I think Wolf will still look even If mia doesnt want him to.

Reply Ryan and the chickens, April 27th, 2008, 2:17 pm

False documents are very easy to be fooled by, even by those who are only playing naive. Ever been to the US congress? *recorded laughter*

Reply Slash Segary, April 27th, 2008, 5:06 pm

Rayn Okay let me tell you then. Slash was a human, if you didn't read pg 125 and pg 126, he was turned into the furry. He would more than likely be one of the people that had made those documents so he wouldn't be fooled into thinking they were real, he would know if they were or not.

Reply Gold the hedgehog, April 27th, 2008, 6:41 pm

just a little mistake i'm suprised no one saw.
"its risky outside and it's risky outside."

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