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May 29th, 2007, 1:00 pm

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Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 1:02 pm

Alright i made a jail....Its not very good but hey whache going to do?

Chicco i give you woodys sprites in the last comic.

just ran 5 Miles......Than soccer....I need sleep

* Falls onto his desk and drools*

Reply Dark the Ninja, May 29th, 2007, 1:05 pm

cool coimc made i join

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 1:11 pm

Was that. Cool comic. May I join?

in that case sure give me your sprites.

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 1:12 pm

Plus a fav might be nice.......I WANT YOUR FAVS!!!

Reply Gold the hedgehog, May 29th, 2007, 1:44 pm

can't help but feel sorry for Jerry.

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 1:48 pm

Gooodddd my plan is worrrkkkiiinggg....

Everyone will start to feel sorry for Jerry and than....I STRIKE!!!!

Reply Comik Radd, May 29th, 2007, 1:49 pm

I need to be in the banner. I'm one of the origional F***ING charicters, DAMNIT! Everybody BUT me is in it I was there before Zack!

And everybody else seems to show up more, too.

That's my imput. I may just be being a tad bitchy though. But I'm hurt that you put the "newbz" in more than me.

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:13 pm

Fine i'll find some where to put you.........

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:13 pm

And the banner isnt my fault.....Chicco made it so bring it up with him

Reply scytheholder, May 29th, 2007, 2:22 pm

How can one of such low IQ come up with an amazing ability to frame.

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 2:23 pm

Hmmm... well, once again, I could never do as well as you have with this comic. I only make grammar corrections. If I get to be annoying, please tell me. I could NEVER put a comic like this together.

Having said that, I'm afraid this one's a little messy.

Panel 1: Small thing, but Finally might be a little misplaced at the end of Grayfang's text. It might be better to say, "Finally! I'm glad that's all settled," or "Well, that's finally settled." You're a much better script-writer than myself, and I'm not realyl sure how to rephrase it. However, it sounds awk. the way it is.

Panel 3: In Adelaide's text, you used the wrong form of "too." You should have used t-o. Too means also, whereas to designates action. It should have read, "You would never do that to..."

Also, as for her head icon, that tuft of purple behind her head is also part of her hair. She has long hair, not a pixie style

Also, It's too late now, but I was actually joking yesterday when I said that "I would sell the ugly twit off for two shiny nickels." My intent for Miles was that he would be attatched to her. Totally my fault, and too late to fix now, but I thought I would point it out just for the sake of doing so.

Panel 4: Miles smile looks oddly perverted... not sure if that's fixable or not. It's probably mine for making the sprite like it is. I actually have an updated sprite that might fit better that doesn't appear in my current sprite-sheet. I'll upload them to the forum later today if you're interested.

Also, in Miles thought-bubble, you used the wrong form of "too" again. You should have used t-o.

Panel 5: The yellow echidna is saying "That trial TOKE forever." Toke should be replaced with "took."

Panel 6: Shuddup is not technically a word, and is, in technicality, an error. It is unprofessional to use it, but I think it fits the general humor of the comic, and I would personally keep it. Someone like Shard might recommend that you change it to "Shut up" however. I'll leave that up to you.

Reply Comik Radd, May 29th, 2007, 2:29 pm

Okay, I'll have ta' kill 'em.
With a fish.
Lawlz.

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 2:35 pm

"How can one of such low IQ come up with an amazing ability to frame."

* * * * *

Sticks and stones Scytheholder, sticks and stones.

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:42 pm

I HATE THASE DARN TOOS AND TO TWOS And....Toot toot....* goes insane*

I use shaddup cause more kinda slang than a actuuly word.

Hmmmmm......I'll see if i can fix it the twit thing

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:42 pm

I really should make you co author miles..

* Goes off muttering too himself*

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 2:45 pm

I'm not qualified to work on a comic like this... besides, I'd be too busy/lazy to work on it.

Oh, and Scytheholder, before you say it, "... but astericks will never hurt me."

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 2:51 pm

Oh, one smaller problem, in panel 2, Miles should have an apostrophe (Miles's, or Miles' depending on who you ask. Miles' would technically imply that Miles was plural, but... like I said, it depends on the grammar textbook you check <_<. I personally would put Miles's.)

Reply scytheholder, May 29th, 2007, 2:53 pm

Miles... STFU! You are now annoying me. Hey a M4 Machine gun! Bye bye Miles!

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:54 pm

*Shoots scythe*

DONT TOUCH MILES I NEED HIM FOR MY GRAMMER MISTAKES!!

* Shoots him again*

Well dont seem to mind writing a long script everyonce in a while....Plus the grammer reports...

Anywhy I fixed most of mistakes......i'll see if i can fix that last one....


I also fixed the twit thing

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 2:56 pm

Ok I foxed that last thing too.....seriously I might drown in my grammer mistakes someday

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 2:58 pm

Many thanks ^_^

As for Scythe_holder: On pain of being filled with imaginary bullets, I shall abstain from taunting your-oh-so-delicate self further <_<

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 3:00 pm

Gah and that was such a good line too.......Now I need find some onther way to make you look cunning and devious.....And crual....

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 3:01 pm

* shoots zack*

WASNT ME KILLING SCYTH ENOUGH!

Seriously way do you people hate Miles....I admit his annoying but his useful

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 3:04 pm

<_<

Unwanted but needed... Oh, loverly -_-

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 3:14 pm

You do realize that's my character, and not actually me, correct?

Or are you reffering to my character?

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 3:15 pm

Um yea I was.....* Hit's him with the gun*

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 3:37 pm

Was actually reffering to Zack... but yeah, dumb question -_-

It does have some logic behind it though: You said don't hurt him, we need him for grammar. I know he's annoying but...

As you don't need the sprite for grammar, it's logical to assume you're reffering to the real me.

But, like I said, I should've realized that you would be far too polite and respectful to say something like that. sorry!

*hits self with gun*

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 3:40 pm

NOOOOO

* Runs over to Miles*

Miles Why....Why...WHY WHY WHY? THAT MY JOB!

* Hits Miles with gun*

Reply Afroman17, May 29th, 2007, 5:19 pm

what the hell is wrong with you people.....

Reply Gold the hedgehog, May 29th, 2007, 5:58 pm

i don't know,i can't help you,i have no idea,no idea!

Reply ...Miles..., May 29th, 2007, 6:09 pm

I think we've all been hit on the head a couple too many times...

Reply jacob the comicmaker, May 29th, 2007, 8:00 pm

The world has gone MAD!!!!

* Goes around in a circle screaming*

Reply Inferno (Guest), May 30th, 2007, 1:32 am

let me free!!!!!!!!!

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